Thursday 4 February 2016

Krish's Moment in Time

The Plane by Krish



As I was watching movies on the tiny screen I was thinking “when will this seat belt sign turn off so I can go use the toilet”. Mum said “just wait”. “You know what I've been waiting far too long I need to go now!” I had drank six cokes and I was about to burst or spring a leak. I took my seatbelt off and ran to the toilet. Suddenly the whole plane turned left. I closed my eyes and tumbled “whoa!!!” I screamed.  I opened my eyes “get off !!! get off you young @?#!*” squealed the furious old grandma. Here I was sitting on an old woman’s lap still needing to use the toilet! I was too scared to get off so right there I sprung a leak.

3 comments:

  1. Very entertaining Krish! I like how you used lots of good language features.
    Maybe next time you could use some more descriptive words for characters.

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  2. Very entertaining Krish! I like how you used lots of good language features.
    Maybe next time you could use some more descriptive words for characters.

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  3. Great work Krish I liked the way you used heaps of describing words and lots of language features. Maybe next time you could use similes and some metaphors

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